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Grief, thou that stills me,
turn me over and kill me.
Decaying am I, wrought and still,
which is it thy want me to fill?

Lovely, how lovely the end of my existance,
bleeding my new form, as though it was an instance
forgotten, long forgotten so many years ago
where I came to be, with nought tears to show...

Sacrifice thyself, thou hath said,
bleed out thy life, I hath read;
Decaying in grief, a lovely sacrifice forgotten;
created destroyed, reborn so rotten...

Grief, thou that stills me!
What hath thy given which now fills me?
Forgotten still thou moves on, my friend;
created destroyed, reborn without end...
©2009 ~Amuris
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Author's Comments

Wake me up, before you go-go.

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*Poem 1410: Blood Poet - © David Tru`stone
*CH@14 - CartheInsane's Challenge #14 Entry
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:icontsirachel:
I like the archaic language. The structure isn't quite straight, but I like how it flows. It's fun to see other people's entries for these things. :D
:iconnoir-phoenix-phantom:
I have to say, this is quite good. :nods:
Very good
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=^.^= <------------Kitty!!

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:iconamuris:
^^; Thanks, I experiment a lot.

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:work:
“If inspiration you seek, find it within your heart, within your soul... Not your mind. What you see, what you write, will become real!”
“Until such a time as I may pass this way again... Fairwell.” - Leo Fox
:love: ~autumn4whispers
:iconamuris:
:bow:

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:work:
“If inspiration you seek, find it within your heart, within your soul... Not your mind. What you see, what you write, will become real!”
“Until such a time as I may pass this way again... Fairwell.” - Leo Fox
:love: ~autumn4whispers
:iconnoir-phoenix-phantom:
:D

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=^.^= <------------Kitty!!

:meow:
:iconcartheinsane:
Wow. I like how you bent the structure. :)

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~I am a poet~
:iconamuris:
^^; I don't think that was my original intention, but thanks. :blush:

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:work:
“If inspiration you seek, find it within your heart, within your soul... Not your mind. What you see, what you write, will become real!”
“Until such a time as I may pass this way again... Fairwell.” - Leo Fox
:love: ~autumn4whispers
:iconcartheinsane:
Well I meant that you still have the structure, but you have an old style of writing with it. :)

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~I am a poet~
:iconamuris:
:D Kay.

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:work:
“If inspiration you seek, find it within your heart, within your soul... Not your mind. What you see, what you write, will become real!”
“Until such a time as I may pass this way again... Fairwell.” - Leo Fox
:love: ~autumn4whispers

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